Spelling and grammatical errors

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Wed Sep 21, 2011 9:13 pm

From one of the miss messages for the brute in training:
He thinks you're an instructor and starts to ask question, but you tell him to drop and give you fifty.
It looks like there should be a "a" between "ask" and "question".

Also, i was about to post the "scrawne" from the brute in training description, but then I finally got the joke.

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Wed Sep 21, 2011 9:31 pm

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Mon Oct 03, 2011 8:59 pm

From one of the green trainee's hit messages:
He starts singing Hello Muddah, Hello Faddah. Clearly, he singing on key isn't taught here.

Fixed. Not sure what the hell happened there.

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Nov 11, 2011 8:37 pm

From the "calling card" description:
It's a good way to spread the word of you presence

Fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Wed Nov 30, 2011 3:14 pm

From "Go Jump a Building", during the Level 12 quest:
A pack of over-muscled hooligans go dashing by,

That looks like it should be "A pack...goes "

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Wed Nov 30, 2011 3:31 pm

From the athelas leaf description:
This small, dry, silvery-grey leaf from a plant that's not uncommon in places that aren't too heavily settled.

That sentence no verb. Perhaps there should be an "is" between "leaf" and "from".

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Wed Nov 30, 2011 9:02 pm

Sanjuro wrote:From the athelas leaf description:
This small, dry, silvery-grey leaf from a plant that's not uncommon in places that aren't too heavily settled.

That sentence no verb. Perhaps there should be an "is" between "leaf" and "from".

Nah, it's fine. Extracting the prepositional phrase and expanding the contraction, we get:

"This small, dry, silvery-grey leaf that is not uncommon..."

xKiv · Post by **xKiv** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 10:34 am

I still parse that sentence as having no predicate.

Subject: leaf
- this
- small
- silvery-grey
- from a plant that's not uncommon ...

Predicate: ?

Edit:
And if you mean
Subject: leaf
- this
- small
- silvery-grey
- from a plant
- that is not uncommon

then you are *still* missing a predicate for leaf.

Or you mean
Subject: leaf
...
Predicate: is
- not uncommon

But then you have a superfluous "that". Also, it doesn't make sense to talk about the leaf being uncommon, I think.

Valmo · Post by **Valmo** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 4:14 pm

The multiuse message on the cracked roasting chestnuts should use the plural rather than the singular because "these chestnut" looks a little off.

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Thu Dec 01, 2011 9:37 pm

The jazz about its commonality is hint at where it can be obtained. Looking over things again, I went ahead and added an "is" in there.

Also, multiuse plural for the roasting chestnuts has been fixed.

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Dec 02, 2011 4:14 pm

From the description of the cracked wallnut:
Wallnuts are a lesser know nut,

Fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Feb 03, 2012 4:38 pm

From one of Evil Shamus' miss messages:
Unfortunately for her, she didn't get the long beam upgrade to the beam peters out after a foot or two.

Perhaps the "to" should be "and" instead?

Fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Mar 09, 2012 6:35 pm

From the description for Percival's gauntlets:
much like when Robin Hood responded the the Sheriff of Rottingham

Fixed

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sun Apr 01, 2012 9:45 am

when buying Synesthesia's synergistic gloves:

You had the mysterious old man 5 silver stars and he hands you a pair of gloves. They smell like music and feel like all the colors of the rainbow.

Fixed!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Mon Apr 09, 2012 3:50 am

Sweet Nostalgia noncombat, second paragraph:

Down one cooridor, stacked in pieces on the floor, you spot something familiar. It's an Elijah bot!

Fixed, thanks!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sat Apr 21, 2012 8:59 am

Smoldering with Fury

Even for a vigilante you're exceptionally angry right now, and you're not going to pull any punches.

Increased weapon damage (scales with level)
Incresaed spell damage (scales with level)

Effect

Increased correctness.

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Mon Apr 23, 2012 7:02 am

Lance du Lac

A nearby lady hands him a really sweet sword which he uses so slash you.

Fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Tue May 01, 2012 5:00 pm

From the pop-up description for the Reformed arsonist sidekick:
Following an unfortunate run-in with Little Charley's firestart kit, your sidekick has sworn off fire...

Fixed, thanks!

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Wed May 02, 2012 5:04 pm

When I have a Reformed arsonist sidekick and use a combat item, the sidekick message and item message are separated by a line break. However, the line break is missing when I use a throwing star-magnetar. I also tried using a spark plug, and the line break appeared, so the problem doesn't seem to be with the "electrical damage" message.

EDIT: It's the regular magnetar combat message, not the ones that give you a buff or item.

Fixed, thanks again!

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Mon May 21, 2012 8:45 pm

[N] hoyifung04: "Moulded Boots" typo-ed (should be "bouts") in Metalmorph menu; "Cybertonium" typo-ed (should be "cybertronium") in Game Manual

Fixed, thanks!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Tue May 22, 2012 2:45 am

You fling your goodly bent knife at your foe, slashing them for 1 damage damage.

Your 2 pairs of rare earth grips been moved to your inventory
Your 2 pairs of earth boots been moved to your inventory
Your 2 glowstaves been moved to your inventory
Your 2 axes of inclination been moved to your inventory
Your 2 enriched pants been moved to your inventory
Your 2 chimney chauses been moved to your inventory
Your 2 my preciousssssses been moved to your inventory
Your 2 pairs of grounding boots been moved to your inventory
Your 2 fiveanddimestaves been moved to your inventory
Your 2 throne axes been moved to your inventory
Your 2 strained jokes been moved to your inventory
Your 2 lark dance troupes been moved to your inventory

hoyifung04 noticed this:

(from the Metalmorph menu)
"Combat Paper Clip to Bent Paper Clip" should read "paperclip" (in both cases);
the "Throne Axe Set" is actually "throne axes"

Post by **Kinak** » Sun May 27, 2012 8:49 am

Patojonas wrote:You fling your goodly bent knife at your foe, slashing them for 1 damage damage.

Hmmm. This should be working properly in general now.

Patajonas wrote:Your 2 pairs of rare earth grips been moved to your inventory

Assuming this was from memento storage, irregular plurals should be good now. If it was somewhere else, let me know.

hoyifung04 noticed this:

Fixed these as well.

Thanks to both of you.

Cheers!
Kinak

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sun May 27, 2012 9:43 am

Kinak wrote:
Patajonas wrote:Your 2 pairs of rare earth grips been moved to your inventory
Assuming this was from memento storage, irregular plurals should be good now. If it was somewhere else, let me know.

Those were all from the hideout's storage.

Post by **Kinak** » Mon May 28, 2012 1:03 pm

Patojonas wrote:Those were all from the hideout's storage.

Irregular plurals should also be working there.

Cheers!
Kinak

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Sun Jun 03, 2012 4:43 pm

From the Multiversal fist description:
What happens when your giant foam rolls over from number one to absolute zero?

That doesn't look right to me. Is that "foam" as in "piece of foam"? Or is there something missing after "foam"?

Fixed!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Fri Jun 08, 2012 1:37 pm

using de-enervation juice:

You down the vial of slightly irridescent liquid. It tastes a bit like peppermint. Or mouthwash. It stings a little going down.

Also present in the item's description ( This stoppered bottle contains a slightly irridescent liquid inside. )

Fixed, thanks!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sun Jul 01, 2012 12:07 pm

spy sports car message:

You hit a button in you schwanky spy car. The speakers blast 'Turkey in the Straw' and your opponent is momentarily distracted looking for the ice cream truck.

Fixed!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sat Jul 14, 2012 11:53 am

Workbench - R.E.T.C.O.N. Device
You need to check the box to verify you reall mean you're ready to go. Sorry, I know it's silly, but it's a necessary precaution.

Fixed!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sun Jul 15, 2012 2:00 pm

You blow a few blasts on the horn. After a moment, you hear a responding blast from within the Zion's Tear building. (should be plural)

Also, after adventuring on the Zion's Tears building for a turn, the left panel displays:

Last Area Patrolled:
Zion's Tears headquarters

Fixed and accepted, respectively.

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Wed Aug 01, 2012 4:29 pm

The plural of "Ouch's lovely flower"...
You have 2 lovely bunch of flowers in your inventory.

Fixed, thanks!

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sat Aug 04, 2012 6:25 am

trying to multiuse too much sugar message:

That's way more candy than you should eat in one night. You're old enough to know better than than to even consider that much sugar. Yuck.

Fixed! Thanks.

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Aug 10, 2012 4:36 pm

From the foe description for the Writhing mass:
honestly, you don't know what all this writing mass is made up of

fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Sat Aug 11, 2012 2:06 pm

From the foe description of the Barred bard:
Pause your paws a moment to sea the gal from the sea

fixed

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Wed Sep 05, 2012 7:23 am

Tanzanian cola description:

"An recipe from sub-Saharan Africa,..."

Fixed, thanks!

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Fri Sep 28, 2012 2:37 pm

The last sentence from the LI Inc. headquarters:
She explains that everyone's down except a few homebrew enthusiasts and folks with the news machines from LI.

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Sat Sep 29, 2012 8:56 am

from string sweater description:

What do you get when you combing knitting needles and computer code?

shouldn't this be combine instead?

Fixed. I blame Harry.

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Sun Sep 30, 2012 12:15 pm

When I updated the wiki for the LI Inc. page, my browser highlighted another typo.
She calms down noticably when you mention yours are mostly working.

According to my dictionary, that should be "noticeably".

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Tue Oct 02, 2012 10:09 am

data miner hit message:

With a swing of his pickaxe, he does something far too nasty to decribe here.

Fixed

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Thu Oct 04, 2012 4:29 pm

From the last paragraph at LI Inc., after getting the submarine:
...the receptionist seems quite agitated, but smiles ruefully she notices it's you.

It looks like there's something missing between "ruefully" and "she".

Patojonas · Post by **Patojonas** » Tue Oct 09, 2012 9:36 am

Processor attack:

Your talk of "users" has marked you as a blasphmer and several minions zap you with their weird pikes.

Deblasphemed, thanks!