Spelling and grammatical errors

Satan · Post by **Satan** » Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:01 pm

On the new pentium recipes in the item effects, foe toughness things are ended with a period. Which looks kind of weird, and I think the other foe toughness things don't have one anyways.

Post by **Ryme** » Mon Jan 18, 2010 7:11 pm

Yeah, I saw that, and it did look weird. I've still got to go back to Muh's consistency thread and clean up a lot of that.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:23 am

I just noticed that the name of frosted cocoa-fruity marshmallow blasts in the criminology lab (which was corrected) is still not consistent. The name used in the shop is "frosted coco-fruity marshmallow blasts", instead of cocoa.

Edit: Corrected, please remove

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:28 am

Ryme wrote:* marshmalows -> marshmallows

Multiuse is still your nemesis:

Like all wise college students know, cereal isn't just for breakfast, it's also a fantastic late-night snack. Like all wise children know, marshmallowy cereal is best if you eat all of the crunchy bits first, and save all of the marshmalows for the very end. You do this now, and enjoy 1 gigantic heaping mouthfuls of sweet, smushy goodness right as you finish off each of the bowls.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:39 am

Ryme wrote:* couple instances of oppoonent

This one instance is still there - critical hit of firearms:

you dive through the air like John Shale, time slowing down as you fire. You even manage to utter a really lame pun at the same time. It all combines to deal 130 damage, leaving your oppoonent in critical condition.

Edit: corrected, please remove

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Jan 19, 2010 8:48 am

Satan wrote:On the new pentium recipes in the item effects, foe toughness things are ended with a period. Which looks kind of weird, and I think the other foe toughness things don't have one anyways.

All the places foe toughness is mentioned, the dot is there. So it is consistent with all other foe toughness modifiers. It is true that some modifiers have the dot and some do not, which is in itself not consistent, and mentioned in that omni-post Ryme mentioned.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Sat Jan 23, 2010 9:29 am

Trying for the "oldest in the game" trophy:

In the "Wear Things" window, there is a "Currently Wearing" section which lists "Off hand" and "Main Hand", with different capitalization.
The list of items has: "Offhand Items" without a space, and with a capitalized "I". All other lists are not so capitalized, e.g. Ranged weapons, Full-body suits.

Avenger · Post by **Avenger** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 4:35 am

Saw this while patrolling over in the new place I'm not allowed to talk about because of the 48 hour rule.

" Your seems slightly put off by your defenses, and takes 1 damage. Your opponent appears to be in pretty bad shape. It pulls back before your defenses cause it critical damage. "

My what?

I would screen shot it but I don't have that button in my laptop, me thinks.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 11:10 am

The name of the Last Area Patrolled is Hyde Park Streets on the first 4 adventures, then it changes to Hyde Park streets

Edit: It's also "Streets" at the beginning of every day.

zillow · Post by **zillow** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 8:18 pm

You're attacked by the spider, but you spied 'er coming and can dodge easily.

This just sounds weird to me...

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 9:06 pm

"spied 'er" = "spied her" = "spider"

Try saying it out loud and you should see the word play.

zillow · Post by **zillow** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 9:10 pm

I was talking about the "can dodge easily" part, the sentence starts in past-tense then goes to present... I think, not very good with these

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Mon Jan 25, 2010 9:11 pm

Oh. Ahem. Yeah. Perhaps "thus you dodge easily" would be better.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Jan 26, 2010 12:08 am

It sounds a valid sentence to me.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Jan 28, 2010 9:55 am

you scare it with a rataplan ratatat that sends it scurrying ratty rathole.

Maybe something is missing between "scurrying" and "ratty rathole"? Perhaps "to its"?

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Jan 28, 2010 10:15 am

Ebeneezer Samuels lists EEK meter as EEK Meter. It doesn't do this for the rest of the items, where only the first letter is capitalized.

Edit: same goes for Scaffold Shoes and Hunk'a Burnin' Gloves.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Mon Feb 01, 2010 9:20 am

Ever since being bitten by a radioactive bat, Vociferous has had the vocal range and volume to oudo top opera singers

Avenger · Post by **Avenger** » Wed Feb 03, 2010 5:04 am

You are blased by your psychic equipment and take 1 psychic damage.

Isn't this blasted?

Got it from the Burnin' Gloves. Love the pun.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Sat Feb 06, 2010 9:34 am

From the text of the encounter "Breaking the Fourth Wall" (the UR option for Intermission):

This here is a copy of the best memory every remembered

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Sat Feb 06, 2010 11:47 pm

Not a biggie, but I thought it would be a nice touch if in the League of Self Promoters the person was called Dalí, with acute.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Sat Feb 13, 2010 10:13 am

Message when you try to access the rooftops without flying (via Last Area Patrolled link)

You shout loudly, "Up, up, and away!" but nothing much happens. Oh, right. You can't fly. Embarassed, you peer around to make sure nobody saw you and then slink off into the darkness.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Feb 25, 2010 8:49 am

I can't check if this typo is still in-game as all my multi have finished the quest, but according to the wiki one of the miss messages for Counsel Harry includes:

I just loved you in Coccoon

The more common spelling is Cocoon.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Mon Mar 01, 2010 11:55 pm

The Sniper skill has "+10 ranged damage". In all other cases in the game, Ranged damage is capitalized. I also added this to the OPOMI (omni-post of modifier inconsistency).

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Mar 02, 2010 12:39 am

The shopkeeper takes the 10 silver stars and hands you a jersey commemmorating the Viking Games.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 1:46 am

When dismissing a wolf:

You wave your arms around and start mumbling weird unintelligible phrases. Your wolf companion is embarassed by your silliness and slinks off.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 9:43 am

One of the hit messages of ethereal behemoth sounds a bit weird:

The glob of spit that sprays out of its mouth is so large and has to fall so far, but the time it hits you, you're pounded into the ground.

Maybe that "but" was meant to be "that by" or something like that? I'm not saying it is totally wrong, it just sounds weird.

Harry Dresden · Post by **Harry Dresden** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 1:05 pm

Muhandes wrote:One of the hit messages of ethereal behemoth sounds a bit weird:

The glob of spit that sprays out of its mouth is so large and has to fall so far, but the time it hits you, you're pounded into the ground.

Maybe that "but" was meant to be "that by" or something like that? I'm not saying it is totally wrong, it just sounds weird.

Also, its should be it's correct?

Oh, and not sure about those commas. Maybe the line should be: The glob of spit that sprays out of it's mouth is so large and has to fall so far that by the time it hits you you're pounded into the ground.

Satan · Post by **Satan** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 1:27 pm

Rule is different with "it", HD. "It's" isn't possessive. It's a contraction for it is. See, I just used it >.>

Harry Dresden · Post by **Harry Dresden** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 2:56 pm

I still think it should still be possessive. It only makes sense.

Post by **Ryme** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 9:51 pm

That's what Satan was saying. As used, the word is possessive, which means "its" is right. The apostrophe version only works if "it is mouth" is what I meant.

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 9:59 pm

Kids these days. I still remember being a member of alt.language.english.possessive.its.has.no.apostrophe

Post by **Ryme** » Thu Mar 04, 2010 10:13 pm

Was that before or after you joined alt.get.offa.mah.lawn?

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Fri Mar 05, 2010 12:39 am

After, of course. I was already ancient when usenet was created.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Mar 09, 2010 3:09 am

When increasing the duration of Upgrade Armor: Motorized:

You retune the high-tech micromotors to your armor, increasing their useful lifetime by quite a bit. (Added for X minutes.)

Satan · Post by **Satan** » Tue Mar 09, 2010 4:05 am

What's the error? You're retuning (verb) the high-tech micrometers (direct object) to (preposition) your armor (indirect object)

Cristiona · Post by **Cristiona** » Tue Mar 09, 2010 4:21 am

"in" would scan better. Micro-motors in your armor, as opposed to configuring vaguely related micro-motors to your armor. Since we only have the one line, we have little context to understand how we're aligning something with our armor. Aligning something inside the armor makes more sense.

"You retune the engine to your car" vs. "You retune the engine in your car".

The grammar's fine; the syntax isn't.

Post by **Ryme** » Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:55 am

Retune to your armor's specifications, basically. They're external, not internal. Part of why they wear off, or something.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Tue Mar 09, 2010 11:59 am

I actually thought it was "of your armor", but either way.

Muhandes · Post by **Muhandes** » Thu Mar 11, 2010 2:20 pm

Got a Little Vandalism in You?

but on the glass of every one of those cases someon drew in permanent marker

Sanjuro · Post by **Sanjuro** » Sat Mar 27, 2010 12:51 am

From the Joiner's Club and Furrier's Den, after purchasing one ticket:

Raffle tickets are 10 chips apiece. So far you have purchased 1 tickets.